Birds have been around since the beginning of time. They
collect all of the seeds and berries throughout the year so they have enough
food to last them in the winter. It is rumored that when a bird is little, its
mom teaches the skills the bird needs to survive. There was one bird who had a
bit of a different story though. This bird, named Nate, did not have a mom. In
fact, he did not have any family at all. His egg fell from the tree before he
was born, so his mother assumed he died. Nate was raised by a few different
birds who happened to see him along their way.
He eventually grew up to witness his first winter. White
stuff was falling like crazy from the sky, but when Nate realized he was
hungry, he could not find food anywhere. He hid up at the top of the tree to
get a better look at where some food may be.
After a few hours, he noticed a few birds gathering around a bush not to
far away. Nate figured it could not hurt to see what all of the commotion was.
Suddenly, birds from every corner were swooping in to see this plant. Nate flew
faster to get to it. When he arrived, he noticed that it was a small green
plant in the middle of winter. Everything else around it was brown and dead.
The white berries on the plant were huge and it definitely had enough to feed
all of the birds for a while. So Nate
decided to be brave and try a berry. He was amazed! But the plant started to
talk to him. “Please eat as much as you want! I am slowly dying because of the
birds. I am so sorry if I am not here tomorrow.” Nate was shocked! Usually when
the plants talked they were rude and said to get away. This one was kind and
giving up his entire life! Nate watched the plant get swarmed by birds who are
not prepared for the winter. For hours he watched thousands of birds peck off a
berry and be on their merry way. Suddenly, Nate had a great idea. “What if we
move you up to the trees? We can hide you there. People will still be able to
eat from your plant, but you will not die because of the tree! You will be
sheltered from the cold and snow, but also can use the trees water.”
The plant seemed hesitant. He thought about it for a little
bit and then decided it was worth a shot. He already knew he was going to die
if he stayed here, so why not try. Nate picked up part of the plant and put him
on a tree. He pecked out part of a branch so the roots of the plant were
wrapped around the trees branch. It worked! The plant, now called mistletoe, is
around on many trees!
Author's Note:
The original story talks about a thunderbird during the winter who decides to bring the dying mistletoe up to the tree. I wanted to keep that same theme but give the bird more of a personality and make the story more vivid.
Bibliography: When the Storm God Rides: Tejas and Other Indians Legends; link to the online reading.
Image: Bird from Wikipedia.
I like your story! You did a good job of giving Nate a likable personality that shows he triumphed over his early hardship instead of faltering.
ReplyDeleteI wonder if you could tie in his interesting background later in the story? What about Nate's father, or maybe somehow referring to his mother again?
Anyway, good work. The story read very much like a lot of the Native American stories that I read this week.
I think you did a good job with this story, and I like the backstory you gave to the bird. I'd like to hear more about him. I felt sorry for him in the beginning, but it was nice that other birds helped him out along the way. It was also a cool touch to have the plant talk back to him!
ReplyDeleteWell, this was an adorable story! I really enjoyed reading it, it’s always nice to read something so innocent and happy. Considering I often write a lot of depressing stuff, it was a joy to read! Great job on bringing out Nate’s personality, you accomplished your goal. You made him likable and kind. I also like how you made him exact opposite of the animals around him. Again, great job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story! I also wrote a story about a bird but when I began writing, I found it kind of hard. It’s nice to read other stories that are similar to your own so it can give you more ideas!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you added the background story about his past. It really shapes his personality. I am glad Nate was able to help the plant because the plant was nice. Overall, I think this was a short and sweet story!